Wednesday, December 12, 2012

final reflection


                Coming into this semester English was one of my classes I worried about. Reading and writing was one of my weakest points and I was never very good at it. This class has completely changed my opinion English, especially writing. This course was a lot of hard work but Professor Thomas made sure we were all prepared for our papers and other work. My first paper was about my mom so it was on the easier side but the next paper that was assigned was a summary and analysis on the book sway. Starting this paper put a damper on my confidence, I was lost. One thing that helped me substantially was the teacher conference on two of our papers. Having that one on one time to meet with Mrs. Thomas and get her feedback made it clear on what I needed to work on to make my paper better. This also helped me on avoiding making the same mistakes for my next paper. Another thing that helped was the preparation for each paper. For example, things like reading and annotating older student’s paper before beginning ours. Creating info graphics and getting involved in our work keep the class interesting and made me want to dig deeper into my research. These ideas helped to improve my writing in many ways.  

            As I am finishing this class I can see all the improvements I’ve made. Everything I have learned I will take with me through my following semesters. Even though I have learned many things to make me a better writer I still have some weaknesses. I can work on my writing skills by learning to add more research and create better transitions so my papers flow better.  For research papers such as my last paper in this course, I need to add more of my own voice and commentary throughout the paper. Next semester I will need to work on forming my thesis statements. Another thing that I also would like to improve would be my understanding of technology and how to properly use it to communicate my thoughts into my papers.

When class started I didn’t know if all the computer usage was going to benefit of confuse me. In the end using all the technology in this course was a lot of help surprisingly. Things such as Digo and our blogs made it easier to keep track of papers, get feedback and review other peoples work. This course also helped me become comfortable with other internet sources such as Prezi, Infogram, and Blogger. All around I think the technology and other tools introduced throughout the semester were extremely helpful in making this course very beneficial. I am very excited to be in Professor Thomas’s class next semester!

Wednesday, December 5, 2012

rough draft of final essay

Kristen Ott

Composition 101: rough draft

Professor Thomas

7 December 2012       

Hurricane Sandy: The Aftermath

            In early October a massive tropical cyclone stormed through the Caribbean and up the Eastern coast of the United States. The storm was labeled hurricane Sandy, and would cause mass panic within the major cities of North Eastern coast. Hurricane Sandy started in the Caribbean on October 19 and quickly developed from a small tropical depression to a tropical storm in just six hours. On October 24th Sandy hit its maximum speeds of 74 mile per hour and was labeled a hurricane. That same day Sandy struck Jamaica, moving through open water gaining strength. Within the next three days the storm would also strike Cuba and most of the islands within the Bahamas. On October 29th Sandy hit Atlantic City, New Jersey, with winds of 80 miles per hour.

            Within minutes the streets of New Jersey were flooded, trees and power lines had fallen, and houses were ripped apart. Jillian Berman states in the Huffington Post, that hurricane Sandy will amount to between 30 to 50 billion dollars in economic losses. Community cooperation in the aftermath of Hurricane Sandy is a good example of how residents come together even when first aid and government are slow to react. Hurricane Sandy’s recovery was the focus in the media coverage for almost a month then slowly died out without real relief for the families.

            As you can imagine the word hurricane is scary as is. Growing up in New Jersey my whole life made it absolutely terrifying to me. Not only was hurricane sandy heading straight for my home, it was heading towards my family. As I watched all the horrible sights on TV I worried for my family and the condition our home was in. My family was amongst the lucky ones that experienced barely any damage caused by the storm. A few weeks after the storm I went home to see my family. Seeing playgrounds and beaches that I grew up at destroyed and demolished made all the horrifying stories surreal. It opened my eyes to all the devastation and destruction the storm had caused, as well as the traumatic experiences the residents went through.

            When thinking of all the residents who lost their homes, valuables, and even their lives, it is easy to imagine what dramatic experiences they went through. With flooding ruining houses, people without power, and no way of transportation the residents of New Jersey are left helpless. Not only has hurricane Sandy affected the lives of those across the country; it has also affected the housing market. With whole neighborhoods demolished in New Jersey residents could see a decline in their real estate in the future. Water damaged soil, houses, and erosion are just a few of the issue at hand. “Hurricane Sandy’s immediate impact on real estate in the hardest hit Northeastern neighborhoods is already painfully evident.” (Brennan) Not only has the storm affected the market for housing in New Jersey, but it has also affected all of the markets within the United States.

            With standing water and rubble littering the streets of New Jersey, thousands of volunteers jump into action to help rebuild the cities. In New York, five thousand temporary workers were hired to help rebuild and clean up the damage from the massive storm. The New York Times reports, “About $27 million in federal Labor Department money will finance the cleanup and rebuilding positions in New York City and eight nearby counties, paying about $15 per hour and generally lasting about six months, state and federal officials said.” FEMA (Federal Emergency Management Agency) is also offering seven hundred temporary jobs to help in the relieve efforts.

            With government agencies such as FEMA working to help relieve the areas struck by hurricane Sandy, it shows how well the United States government responded to the disaster. With government temporary government workers being paid to clean up damages and rebuild, as well as those who are helping the community; the government is still working to improve conditions. With so much damage to cities the price of rebuilding is only going up. According to the New York Times it is estimated that over thirty-two billion will be needed to repair the housing and infrastructures.  Another ten billion dollars will be used to help further protect the transit systems, the sewage treatments facilities, as well as the power networks.

            The United States government was struck with questions after being accused of taking too long to react to the damages in the Eastern cities. With people stranded in flooded homes, and left without food, water, and electricity; they soon turned and began to blame the U.S. government agencies such as FEMA and Red Cross. While the public was being supplied with public housing, bathrooms, food, and many other resources people still complained about things that the government was providing for them. With some parts of the cities unreachable due to flooding and damaged roads, the government did as much as they could at the time. With over seventy-five hundred volunteers from the FEMA organization, they launched their efforts to help rebuild and clean up the damages caused by Sandy.

            With the aftermath of the storm, the media began to relay the disturbing visuals to the American people. With immediate media assistance, radio shows, television, and concerts were donating to help fund the rebuilding of our North Eastern cities. With news channels and advertisements showing the damages of the storm to their audiences, people who were unable to see how largely the storm affect cities like New York and New Jersey were able to give to help others. For a solid month the media did a great job at helping to show the damages in New Jersey. But after a month the messages seemed to get lost. There were little to no messages at all about the cleanup and seemed to be forgotten about. Although the news stations and advertisements seemed to do a great job at first, it now seemed like they had moved on.

            Like people always say, seeing is believing. As images from the storm come across the screen they touch people’s hearts. These viewers are now able to see the horrors instead of just hear the stories. Having a lot of media coverage would promote people to help even in the smallest way. In our world today the fastest way to spread the word is through some type of media. Media coverage refuses to talk about climate change so they don’t put much time into issues such as hurricane sandy. Cable news media, in keeping up with Romney and Obama during the presidential debates; continue to ignore climate changes even though their New York offices are under water because of it. (Khalek) Media is a large deciding factor on how fast news gets to people to make them aware and how the government will also react to the situation at hand.

            The big questions is how effective is the relief effort. Going into this situation I believe the government had good intentions. Their plan of helping the victims and starting to rebuild communities just fell short. Government and government aids such as FEMA took a while before any help was even sent. Residents came together to help clean up and restore their lives to the best of their ability while they waited on the government’s aid. In times like this I think help should be sent immediately. There are plenty of ways the government and media could have sped up the process. Media had coverage on Hurricane Sandy for about a month after it took place. In my opinion the media should have kept on the issue and encourage people to continue to help and donate in any way they could to the relief, whether that be by radio, television, or even advertisements. All that media attention would cause not only more people to be willing to lend a helping hand but it would also put the spotlight on the government and force them to make arrangements for aids and materials to be sent faster. Hurricanes are traumatic experiences that can cause families to lose everything. When a storm such as hurricane Sandy takes place it should not take an extended amount of time to get help on the scene to the take care of the families affected and to start repairing all of the damage.  

            Hurricane Sandy opened the eyes of many people and showed the North Eastern coast they are just as vulnerable as any other city to hurricanes. With the media failing to cover the aftermath of the hurricane the public has seemed to forget the amount of damage that was done and is still lingering. With government agencies such as FEMA and Red Cross stepping in to help, we are forced to wonder; Are they really doing all they can do? Even though FEMA deployed 7,414 workers to assist in the relief effort, they were not positioned fast enough. (FEMA) This forced the residents of New Jersey to handle the clean-up themselves. We need the government to work faster to resolve problems within the states, as well as doing everything in their power to help the families that are left with nothing in their possession because of Hurricane Sandy.

Friday, November 30, 2012

Tuesday, November 20, 2012

topic proposal


My topic for the final essay is Hurricane Sandy. I’m the only one writing about it in class and I think it will make a great paper. I’m originally from New Jersey so my hometown was affected by the storm. Although I don’t know much about this topic yet with my family going through it I will have a lot of background information and personal experiences. Weather it is the actual terrifying stories of the storm while it was taking place or the after math and recovery there are many different views of this issue.

Throughout my essay I plan on going into detail and looking at the storm through those different perspectives. I intend on writing about what it was like for the victims, the Fema trying to help the best they can, and the cost of it or the government’s view. With the storm being recent and in the news it will be easy to find information. This issue is very conversational because many people say things like fema is not doing enough to help out and the devastation is only getting worse. Researching this topic will help me to form my own opinion on the topic and be able to defend it by answering questions and looking at the storm from a variety of viewpoints.

My research questions as of right now are: What are we doing to help with the devastation? How deeply were the residents affected? How many people are there for the recovery? What was the total cost of these efforts? How bad is the damage in different areas? How do the residents, government, and aids feel about the hurricane? Some of my possible sources that will help me answer those questions are: http://www.cenews.com/magazine-article----improving_disaster_resilience-9081.html http://proxy.uscupstate.edu:3171/ps/retrieve.do?sgHitCountType=None&sort=DA-SORT&inPS=true&prodId=AONE&userGroupName=uscspart_lib&tabID=T002&searchId=R2&resultListType=RESULT_LIST&contentSegment=&searchType=BasicSearchForm&currentPosition=3&contentSet=GALE%7CA307272947&&docId=GALE|A307272947&docType=GALE&role= http://proxy.uscupstate.edu:2555/ehost/detail?vid=3&hid=105&sid=ad18e830-c6ad-431e-92e7 f5564ef4678a%40sessionmgr113&bdata=JnNpdGU9ZWhvc3QtbGl2ZQ%3d%3d#db=a9h&AN=82958533 http://proxy.uscupstate.edu:3991/ic/ovic/NewsDetailsPage/NewsDetailsWindow?failOverType=&query=&prodId=OVIC&windowstate=normal&contentModules=&mode=view&displayGroupName=News&limiter=&currPage=&disableHighlighting=false&source=&sortBy=&displayGroups=&search_within_results=&action=e&catId=&activityType=&scanId=&documentId=GALE%7CA309208054 http://proxy.uscupstate.edu:3991/ic/ovic/NewsDetailsPage/NewsDetailsWindow?failOverType=&query=&prodId=OVIC&windowstate=normal&contentModules=&mode=view&displayGroupName=News&limiter=&currPage=&disableHighlighting=false&source=&sortBy=&displayGroups=&search_within_results=&action=e&catId=&activityType=&scanId=&documentId=GALE%7CA308476313 http://www.huffingtonpost.com/2012/11/20/hurricane-trees-superstorm-sandy_n_2167017.html

Monday, November 5, 2012

paper 3 reflection


This paper was the hardest for me yet. It was hard for me to come up with even three pages. After getting professor Thomas’s help I then went back and made my corrections and turned it into a six page paper. The works cited was the easier part for me surprisingly. I follow step by step from our bridging the difference book and it really helped. I use MLA format throughout my paper and my title I think is good. In my introduction is state the author, title, and topic. My thesis is clear and easy to follow along with. I could have incorporated more research or used more sources then I did. I think my summary of the song is perfect. It doesn’t take much of the first paragraph but it still gets to the point and helps you to understand the song at face value before I break it apart and analyze it. In my paper I follow my thesis and support my claims with concrete evidence and loads words to make them stronger. In my conclusion I restate my thoughts throughout the paper and sum up what I just went over. I give new ideas and encourage the reader to think further into it. I put a lot of time and work into this essay and all in all this paper was rough to write but now that’s its over I’m confident that it was an okay paper and I did my best.

Wednesday, October 31, 2012

really rough draft


Kristen Ott

Composition: pop Culture paper

Professor Thomas

29 October 2012

A soft side of Miranda; as shown in The House That Built Me

            “Up those stairs in that little back bedroom is where I did my homework and I learned to play guitar,” as Miranda Lambert sings these words you can take yourself back on that emotional journey to your childhood. Miranda Lamberts song, “The House that built me,” shows the importance of home and your childhood. Throughout the song you automatically place yourself in that time in your life and imagine the days and the home of your childhood. Having an image of home can be directly connected with who you grow up to be. This song is the perfect way to back up the saying “home is where the heart is.” Miranda’s song uses strong images, her relative past, and an important structure to get a message to her listeners.

            As you listen to the song Miranda creates a variety of images in your mind.  She uses strong words and imagery to evoke emotion and make it easier for the audience to relate to her song. She uses things like handprints on the front porch and the live oak in the front yard to show how every part of that house has memories and has affected her life in one way or another. Using so much imagery lets the audience picture things similar to those that took place in their own childhood and get more involved in the words. Having such strong imagery aids in making the song stronger by allowing the audience to feel as if they are part of the song or the scene and also influences inferential thinking.

            Just as portrayed by the images, this song has a very strong emotional pull. The first time Miranda heard this song it was on a CD being pitched to Blake. It came on and she immediately started to cry. She knew it was special the very first moment she heard it she said. Living in a little farmhouse as a young child connected Lambert to this song. Miranda lived in the same house all the way up to when she turned 14; her connection to this song is undeniable. Just as the song says, “And nail by nail and board by board Daddy gave life to mama's dream,” Miranda’s dad fixed up the house piece by piece as she grew up. To this day Miranda’s parents live right down the street from that same exact house. Having this background made the song so much closer to the heart for her and created the emotional aspect for the recording.

            The structure of “the house that built me” adds to the emotional value of this song. Throughout the song the course repeats several times making a point to explain over and over again the need to come back home to find the person you were. In Miranda’s song she uses her home figure and her identity. She talks about going back one more time just to take back the memories. In the song she portrays her home as becoming her self image in the future. “I thought if I could touch this place of feeling This brokenness inside me might start healing Out here it's like I'm someone else I thought that maybe I could find myself” and “You leave home, you move on And you do the best you can I got lost in this whole world And forgot who I am,” these two parts of the song exemplifies how much her home has shaped who she is now and without she lost herself and the only way to get back is to remember the “home” that’s made her who she is.

            After listening to this song and looking deeply into it I got out of it is the importance of home as a child. All aspects of this song show the struggle of child homelessness. Child Homelessness in amongst one of the largest social issues today. Children without homes suffer largely in the long run. Some children can’t even picture all of the images in Miranda’s song like the bedroom and the front porch. Homeless children are lacking all of these memories that she says formed her future.  Many homeless children grow up with no education and have a more chance of acting out as they grow up. Having a childhood home is very important not only for shaping the minds and morals of children but also it encases memories and sentimental value for the future.  

 

Thursday, October 18, 2012

song idea for essay three


I have always loved to listen to country music since I was a little girl. For the most part, every country song has some type of message in it. For my song I choose the House that built me by Miranda Lambert. Miranda has an amazing voice and always includes some social problem or input on something throughout her songs. This certain song talks about the impact her home as a child has on who she is now. I think this is a good song to write about because there’s many ways I can interrupt her message. I plan on connecting it to homeless children in today’s world and the impact that may have on their future and who they grow up to be. In the song Miranda talks about her old house and needing to walk through it one last time because she forgot who she really is. She uses the house as a metaphor for who she is or wants to be and since she feels like she lost herself she needs to go back to find the person she is. Using the home figure has a strong emotional effect because when most people think about home they think about family and their childhood. All the components of home mold the person you become in the future. I feel like taking apart this song and unfolding the social issue she refers to will make a great paper and show how strong the impact of her song actually is.

Monday, October 15, 2012

paper reflection


I wrote my paper on chapter two, The Swamp of Commitment. I’m not very good at writing papers, especially one that is more academically focused so while this paper was hard for me, I think I put in the time and met with Mrs. Thomas a few times to make sure my paper was still okay. My paper follows MLA format and is almost a full four pages. My summary includes the author, text, and title. I believe my thesis can be easily picked out and the topic of my paper is clear. Throughout my paper I did my best to focus in on analyzing rather than summarizing my chapter. I summarized in my introduction paragraph and from that point on I narrowed in on taking the part piece by piece and finding out if the authors achieved their goal of backing up there theory behind the sway. Many times in my paper I make reference to the text. I quote in the introduction paragraph and then point out phrases or words that relate to the topic of my certain paragraph later on in my paper. I indicate the parts I took from the text by quoting the page number after it. My conclusion sums up my paper and leaves the reader with my view on the way chapter two was written. I think all around my paper stays more on the analytical side and gets my thoughts across. After reading my paper you have a good idea of what chapter two is about and how effective it is for the reader.

final draft


Is being Committed always a positive

            Have you ever wondered what goes on in your head when you make those decision that later make you say, “Why did I act so stupidly?” The book Sway the Irresistible Pull of Irrational Behavior by Ori Brafman and Rom Brafman talks about several different sways that take part in your everyday life. In chapter two the authors focus on the sway of commitment combined with loss aversion. Throughout the chapter they list examples in which commitment acts on people and their decision making. “Loss aversion, on its own, is strong but when it converges with commitment the force becomes an even more powerful influence in shaping our thinking and decision making.”(39) Things like putting all your effort into a doomed relationship, and betting over 100 dollars for a twenty dollar bill are irrational decisions. Being committed to the situation makes you react in a different way based on the fear of altering what you are used to. In chapter two, The Swamp of Commitment, the authors explain the sway and their view with great impact through strong examples, powerful language, and linear structure.

            The purpose of this chapter is to show the reader and help you understand that commitment is not always a positive thing. In chapter two the author does a great job of showing you detailed and relevant examples of how commitment can affect you. In the book one of the first examples is about Steve Spurrier and the University of Florida’s football team. Rom and Ori go on to tell you that Steve made the gators successful by doing what the other coaches were too afraid to do, getting rid of the old “war of attrition” strategy and introducing a new “fun and gun” strategy. The gators beat many powerhouses all because there coaches were too committed to their way of playing the game rather than steering away from that and playing more aggressively. This example does a wonderful job backing up this sway. It is relevant and presents an interesting story that most people want to read about. This example is easy to understand and clearly shows a way commitment and loss aversion affects your average everyday person.

            They provide many examples in this chapter but the best one to back up their position on commitment is the last example with Lyndon B. Johnson. LBJ had goals to form The Great Society and to stop the spread of communism in Southeast Asia. These goals brought Johnson to the Vietnam War. Just a few years later Johnson was deep into the war and was realizing there was no way out. LBJ, being too committed to his intensions, would no back out. Instead of accepting defeat and trying to build his presidency back up he kept on fighting in what was clearly a lost cause. LBJs example is great for the reader. This example shows that commitment can happen to even the highest ranked people and there’s no way out once you’ve already committed so far. This example is also great because it is relatable to today’s society. Johnson’s situation can be applied in politics today. Obama is so committed to getting the deficit down and fixing our debt when in actuality he is making the debt almost three times worse. Instead of realizing what he’s doing isn’t working he is too committed and won’t stop and fix larger problems that he has now created. Just like commitment affected Lyndon B. Johnson at large, Obama is not only on the road to ruining his goals but most likely his presidency also because of his commitment to ill-fated hopes.

            The author uses strong language to heighten the reader’s belief in the sway of commitment. Using vivid words can aid the reader in following the text and getting a better feel for what is taking place in the story. Throughout the chapter words such as “victim,” (29) “locked in,” (31) “digging a deeper hole,” (35) and “window of opportunities” (28) evoke emotion in the reader. When the author refers to someone becoming a victim of commitment the reader connects that word to a strong emotion and involves them in the dreadfulness of the situation. On the other hand reading words like window of opportunities taps into the reader’s optimistic side and make the reader want to know more. The authors use this to their advantage because using words that are powerful bring out the emotion in the reader and cause them to be more connected to the text and more believing of the sway. While the loaded language creates the mood of the text, the format of the chapter adds to the all-around effectiveness.

            Chapter two gives many different examples that appeal to everyone. I believe the linear structure of this chapter makes the examples stronger. Throughout the chapter the authors connect all the examples to each other. Doing this makes all the stories linger in your mind and shows that commitment acts in the same way in most situations. For example, early in the chapter they talk about college students bidding on a twenty dollar bill. In this example Rom and Ori talk about the stages you go through until you’re too far into the bidding that you realize you’re committed. Later in the chapter the example about LBJ is connected to the bidding story. They use the example of the “12 to 16 dollar stage” where you abandon the possibility of retreat. Setting it up so the examples add onto each other makes the text more believable. The structure of the chapter influences the way you look at the examples and the way they impact your thought on the author’s views. The authors start off with the football game example and ended it with the LBJ war story to show sway not only acts in a game scenario but also in real life situations where people’s lives are on the line. Using the linear structure to build each example off of each other gives the reader concrete evidence of how sway acts upon you.

In my opinion the authors put this text together well and get their point across. Chapter two is very organized and every aspect of it flows together and gives well thought out evidence to support their theory on the sway of commitment. They take you through several examples, whether it’s a short example or a detailed one, they paint the picture in your head and take you step by step of what happens to cause you to act in irrational ways when making choices. The language they use throughout the chapter adds emotion and gets you more invested in the text. The impact of this text is greatly influenced by the linear structure of all the examples. All three of these components support the author’s ideas on the sway of commitment and proves to the reader it has an effect on many peoples thought process. The Swamp of Commitment is very effective in taking the reader through different types of situations where commitment takes part in making choices and shows the reader it can act on anyone at any given time. It is important to be aware of how loss aversion and commitment can act together and set you on the path of irrational decisions because knowing about the sways can narrow your chances of being strongly effected every time. Chapter two proves to the reader that commitment is not always looked at in a positive light and can be a downfall when it becomes a negative force.

Monday, October 8, 2012

first two pages draft

Kristen Ott
Professor Thomas
Composition: literary summary and analysis
5 October, 2012
Chapter two
            Have you ever wondered what goes on in your head when you make those decision that later make you say, “Why did I act so stupidly?” The book Sway by Ori Brafman and Rom Brafman talks about the irresistible pull of irrational behavior. In chapter two, the swamp of commitment, the authors focus on the sway commitment and also commitment combined with the first sway, loss aversion. Throughout the chapter they list examples in which commitment acts on people and their decision making. Loss aversion, on its own, is strong but when it converges with commitment the force becomes an even more powerful influence in shaping our thinking and decision making.(Ori and Rom Brafman page 39) Things like putting all your effort into a doomed relationship, and betting over 100 dollars for a twenty dollar bill are irrational decisions. Being committed to the situation makes you react in a different way based on the fear of altering what you are used to. In chapter two, the swamp of commitment, the authors explain the sway and their view with great impact through strong examples, powerful language, and a connection of all the examples.
            The purpose of this chapter is to show the reader and help you understand how the sway commitment works and the impact it has on your thinking process. In chapter two the author does a great job of showing you different examples of how commitment can affect you. In the book one of the first examples is about Steve Spurrier and the University of Florida’s football team. Rom and Ori go on to tell you that Steve made the gators successful by doing what the other coaches were too afraid to do, getting rid of the old “war of attrition” strategy and introducing a new “fun and gun” strategy. The gators beat many powerhouses all because there coaches were too committed to their way of playing the game rather than steering away from that and playing more aggressively. This example does a wonderful job how backing up this sway. This example is easy to understand and clearly shows a way commitment affects your average everyday person.
            They provide many examples in this chapter but the best one to back up their position on commitment is the last example with Lyndon B. Johnson. LBJ had goals to form The Great Society and to stop the spread of communism in Southeast Asia. These goals brought Johnson to the Vietnam War. Just a few years later Johnson was deep into the war and was realizing there was no way out. LBJ, being too committed to his intensions, would no back out. Instead of accepting defeat and trying to build his presidency back up he kept on fighting in what was clearly a lost cause. LBJs example is great for the reader. This example shows that commitment can happen to even the highest ranked people and there’s no way out once you’ve already committed so far. This example is also great because it is relatable to today’s society. Johnson’s situation can be applied in politics today. Obama is so committed to getting the deficit down and fixing our debt when in actuality he is making the debt almost three times worse. Instead of realizing what he’s doing isn’t working he is too committed and won’t stop and fix larger problems that he has now created. Just like commitment affected Lyndon B. Johnson at large, Obama is not only on the road to ruining his goals but most likely his presidency also because of his commitment to ill-fated hopes.

Sunday, September 16, 2012

Final paper


Kristen Ott

Professor: T. Thomas

Composition : literacy narrative

14 September 2012

                                                           RSD? Suck It up

The big white gloves, rides like “It’s a Small world,” and characters like Cinderella and Donald Duck are the first things that come to mind when thinking about Disney world.  No matter how old you get the excitement of going to Florida and getting the chance to visit the parks never subsides. I have been going to Disney world every year since I was six so I thought this year would be like any other, a jam packed, forced family fun vacation. But little did I know along with all the excitement that would soon be here a big change would come shortly after. Nothing could go wrong its Disney world right? Wrong. Even though Disney is the happiest place on earth that is the place I was forced to first learn about RSD.

            Going to Chef Mickey’s in Disney is one of my family’s traditions. Four years ago in 2008 we were out to dinner together enjoying our time. Goofy, the character, was visiting our table and taking pictures with everyone. As my mom got up it almost looked like she was, or attempting to, dance with goofy as he was talking to my brother. When we all stopped laughing we realized my mom was no longer moving but just looking down at the floor. Minutes later we found out she had actually hurt herself. The carpet by our table was pulled up and my mom’s foot got caught underneath it. What looked like dancing turned out to be a disaster. My mom had tripped over the piece of rug and was now almost in tears. What looked like a mass had formed on the top of her left foot. My mom is very stubborn and refused to go to the hospital that night or tend to the injury at all.

 Not getting any sleep that night because of the overwhelming amount of pain she could not take it anymore. She was swayed into visiting the hospital. The doctors then decided it would be a good idea to perform surgery to try and get the mass out. Once the surgery was over she felt better for a few days and then was in pain once more. This pain was much different than the one she previously suffered. She could not even put her shoes on because the touch of the material sent shock waves through her foot. This time she waited until we got home to go see the doctor. It seemed like every doctor we went to had something different to say. As the time went on the pain grew at an unbearable rate. My mom, being the woman she is, held strong and believed the doctors were missing something such as a broken bone or a ligament so she would soon be well. My family is firm believers in the “suck it up” motto when an injury was involved so that’s exactly what she attempted to do.

Finally after going to several doctors we found one who would know exactly what he was talking about. After an exhausting week of going through various doctors, we were ready to hear some news that would put us at ease. We awaited the doctor to tell us she would have to stay off of it for a few weeks and to wear a little brace so she would be up and moving within a month or two. We were wrong. The doctor said technical terms that we did not understand then finally said she was diagnosed with the disease called RSD.

            My hands started shaking because the thought of losing my mom was inevitable. I listened closely and attempted to decipher the doctor’s words to find out more. I could feel my stomach slowly turning as my heart swelled up and my eyes got glassy while tears quickly filled them. Nothing. I couldn’t understand a thing. Instantly several questions swarmed my mind yet I didn’t want to speak up and show the emotions that were bursting inside of me. My mom and dad were there to ask the questions so I had to do my best to sit patiently and wait for something I could understand. How could he not explain to us if it was fatal or not! As soon as we stepped outside I burst into tears as my siblings and I ran to my dad and quietly asked if we were going to lose our mom. I could hear my heart pounding out of my chest while my brother, my sister, and I waited dreadfully for my dad’s answer. Finally he said no the disease wasn’t fatal. I can’t even begin to explain the relief and the smile that hit my face.

I thought to myself RSD couldn’t be so bad especially if it wasn’t going to take my mom away from our family. That moment right there is what changed my life forever. It wasn’t just okay for me to think RSD wasn’t such a bad thing just because it wasn’t fatal. Come to think about it, I didn’t know anything about my mom’s new disease. This made me crazy! I wanted to know what I could do and how I could help right away.

            RSD stands for reflex sympathetic dystrophy syndrome. RSD is a chronic condition characterized by burning pain and abnormalities in the sensory, motor and autonomic nervous systems. The syndrome usually develops in an injured part like a broken leg or following surgery, which in this case it was caused from my mom’s surgery. So basically RSD affects your nerves in all different locations of your body.

I also learned there is no cure but there are a few treatment methods. One, among the few was ketamine treatment. This is where they transfer the drug through IV into the patients system. This isn’t a permanent treatment and it doesn’t last very long. Along with this, I also discovered RSD can easily spread to all other parts of the body. Learning this made me nervous; my mom was in enough pain just because of it being in her left leg. I quickly researched what I could do to help.  All I can really do for her is to help her with normal tasks that have now become difficult, such as lifting things, getting out of bed in the morning, driving, and on bad days walking may even be an exasperating thing to try and accomplish. Knowing this made me strive to make my mom feel comfortable by doing things around the house that would be painful for her or helping her take on battles such as ketamine treatments. I also keep current with any new updates on her disease and ways to help.

            Even though this wasn’t a positive event in my life, I did get something good out of it. Learning about my mom’s disease helped me to better understand what she’s going through and what I can do for her. This experience taught me that having a better understanding of things makes it easier to handle and to figure out where to go with the situation at hand. To this day my mom is of course still dealing with reflex sympathetic dystrophy syndrome and it has spread to all of her left side and to her chest. My mom is the strongest woman I know and is dealing with it better than I could ever imagine but it is helpful having people around her educated and well aware of the disease. We are doing everything we can to help. Four years ago, today, and four years from now my mom will still be struggling with RSD and going through treatment. It doesn’t matter if it’s past, present, or future I will keep researching and helping my mom in any way I can.

At a young age I took on more responsibility as a daughter. With my dad was always working and my mom being disabled I had to start doing things throughout the day. I started helping prepare supper, doing laundry, and picking up after my twin brother and older sister so my mom would not have to stress over the house being a mess or getting supper on the table. Having RSD restricts my mom from doing everyday things like going up steps, enjoying a walk on the beach, or even being able to walk around the university’s campus with me. Learning about my mom’s RSD will always have an effect on my life. Taking the time to read into and gain the knowledge of this disease has made me always want to dig deeper and find out more so I can fully understand the topic at hand.  Not only did RSD change my mom’s life but mine also. Turns out reflex sympathetic dystrophy syndrome isn’t a “suck it up” kind of disease and will not go away in a few months. This just goes to show there’s something you can learn from everything that happens in life, good or bad.

Saturday, September 15, 2012

reflection of literacy narrative


Writing is not my best subject and I’m not the greatest at it. One thing I know I did right was follow the MLA format! My paper and my title do connect together. I took something from the paper and turned it around to make the title interesting and have the paper come together at the end with the sentence that goes along with the title. Starting from the introduction I think the essay flows well for the most part. My topic is clear and it should be easy for the reader to follow. Next time I will work on spending some extra time on making the transitions better and having the essay fit together perfectly. In my opinion the paper makes sense and is understandable. I think my introduction and my ending could use a lot of work and my body paragraphs could be slowed down and made a little clearer.

Though out my story I use a lot of imagery and emotionally powerful words so the reader can picture what was happening or going through my mind at the moment. I used this is parts to build the suspense or make the reader wanting to know more. I think I could have used it more in certain parts but other than those few parts I think my imagery worked well. As I said my closing could use some work but I think my reflection was good, I explained how this memory affected my life then and how it will affect my life in the future. I explained how even though it wasn’t the best situation I still managed to get something good out of it. I did answer all of the questions that were involved in the assignment. I told the reader what happened and explained exactly what it is using detail and examples. Then I reflected on that event and explained why I still think about it to this day. I could have used a wider vocabulary and gave some more detail to slow the event down and make the reader feel more. The transition in my introduction from the imagery to the event could have flowed better. Also my transition into my last paragraph could have used some work to make the piece come together better. All in all I think my paper was okay but I plan on working to make every paper better as the semester goes on. I also plan on becoming best friends with the writing center! I know writing is not my forte so I obviously need some work but I hope to become a better writer.

Friday, September 7, 2012

lessons learned- literacy narrative


Lessons learned

 

The big white gloves, the rides, the parades, and most of all the characters are the first things that come to mind when thinking about Disney world.  No matter how old you get the excitement of going to Florida and getting the chance to visit the parks never subsides. I have been going to Disney world every year since I was six. In my mind this year would be like any other, a jam packed, forced family fun vacation. Little did I know along with all the excitement that would soon be here a big change would come shortly after. Nothing could go wrong its Disney world right? Wrong. Even though Disney is the happiest place on earth that is the place I was forced to first learn about RSD.

            Going to chef mickeys in Disney is one of my family’s traditions. Four years ago in 2008 we were out to dinner together enjoying our time. Goofy the character was visiting our table and taking pictures with everyone. As my mom got up it almost looked like she was, or attempting to, dance with goofy as he was talking to my brother. When we all stopped laughing we realized my mom was no longer moving but just looking down at the floor. Minutes later we found out she had actually hurt herself. The carpet by our table was pulled up and my mom’s foot got caught underneath it. What looked like dancing turned out to be a disaster. My mom had tripped over the piece of rug and a mass had formed on the top of her left foot. My mom is a stubborn person and refused to go to the hospital that night. A few days later she was in so much pain she was convinced into visiting the hospital. The doctors then decided it would be a good idea to perform surgery to try and get the mass out. Once the surgery was over she felt better for a few days and then was in pain again. This kind of pain was different she couldn’t even put her shoes on because the material sent shock waves through her foot. This time she waited until we got home to go see the doctor. It seemed like every doctor we went to had something different to say. As the time went on the pain got worse and worse. My mom being the woman she is held strong and believed the doctors were missing something and it was just a broken bone or a ligament so she would soon be fine. Finally after going to several doctors we found one who would know exactly what he was talking about. Going through doctors for a week straight was exhausting and we were all ready to hear exactly what we wanted. We awaited the doctor to tell us she would have to stay off of it for a few weeks and wear a little brace and then she would be up and moving within a month or two. We were wrong. The doctor said technical terms that we did not understand then finally said she was diagnosed with the disease called RSD.

            As my hands started uncontrollably shaking the thought of losing my mom was inevitable. I listened closely seeing if I could decipher the doctor’s words to find out more. I could feel my stomach slowly turning as my heart swelled up and my eyes got glassy while tears quickly filled them. Nothing, I couldn’t understand a thing. How could he not explain to us if it was fatal or not! As soon as we stepped outside I burst into tears as my siblings and I ran to my dad and quietly asked if we were going to lose our mom. I could hear my heart pounding out of my chest while my brother, my sister, and I waited dreadfully for my dad’s answer. Finally he said no the disease wasn’t fatal. I can’t even begin to explain the relief and the smile that hit my face. I thought to myself RSD couldn’t be so bad especially if it wasn’t going to take my mom away from our family. That moment right there is what changed my life forever. It wasn’t just okay for me to think RSD wasn’t such a bad thing just because it wasn’t fatal. Come to think about it I didn’t know anything about my mom’s new found disease. This made me crazy I wanted to know what I could do and how I could help right away.

            RSD stands for reflex sympathetic dystrophy syndrome. RSD is a chronic condition characterized by burning pain and abnormalities in the sensory, motor and autonomic nervous systems. The syndrome usually develops in an injured part like a broken leg or following surgery, which in this case it was caused from my mom’s surgery. So basically RSD affects your nerves in all different locations of your body. I also learned there is no cure but there are a few treatment methods. One among the few was ketamine treatment. This is where they transfer the drug through IV into the patients system. This isn’t a permanent treatment and it doesn’t last very long. Along with this I also discovered RSD can easily spread to all other parts of the body. Learning this made me nervous; my mom was in enough pain just because of it being in her left leg. I quickly researched what I could do to help.  All I can really do for her is to help her with normal tasks that have now become difficult, such as lifting things, getting out of bed in the morning, driving, and on bad days walking may even be an exasperating thing to try an accomplish. Knowing this made me strive to make my mom feel comfortable and keep current with any new updates on her disease and ways to help.

            Even though this wasn’t a positive event in my life I did get something good out of it. Learning about my mom’s disease helped me to better understand what she’s going through and what I can do for her. This experience taught me that having a better understanding of things makes it easier to handle and to figure out where to go from there. To this day my mom is of course still dealing with reflex sympathetic dystrophy syndrome and it has spread to all of her left side and to her chest. My mom is the strongest woman I know and is dealing with it better than I could ever imagine but it is helpful having people around her educated on the disease and doing everything we can to help. Four years ago, today, and four years from now my mom will still be struggling with RSD and going through treatment. It doesn’t matter if it’s past, present, or future I will keep researching and helping my mom in any way I can. Not only did RSD change my mom’s life but mine also. This just goes to show there’s something you can learn from everything that happens in life, good or bad.

Saturday, September 1, 2012

mother tongue and idea for literacy narrative


One of the stories I read was Mother Tongue by Amy Tan. This was my favorite out of the three i read. I liked her story so much because it was easy to relate to. In the story she talks about code switching and the different types of the English language she uses. She talks about how she talks around her family compared to the way she would talk is she were giving a long formal speech. She says when she’s around family it’s almost like they are speaking "broken" English but around professionals she uses more punctuation and a larger, more sophisticated vocabulary. I believe everyone could relate to her story in some way. We all change the way we talk or expand our vocabulary depending on who our audience is. I think all around Amy Tan’s Mother Tongue was a great story and very easy to understand.

 

RSD (Reflexive Sympathetic Dystrophy) is a chronic condition characterized by burning pain and abnormalities in the sensory, motor and autonomic nervous systems.

After thinking long and hard about what I would write about for my literacy narrative I believe my best idea is about my mom. Four years ago my family was in Disney world and my mom had an accident. Believe it or not my mom tripped over a piece of carpet that was pulled up in a restaurant. After going through surgery weeks after she was diagnosed with a disease called RSD. The first thing I though was I’m going to lose my mom. As you can imagine anyone would break into tears at this thought. Little did I know I wasn’t going to lose my mom (thank god). Actually come to think about it I had no idea what RSD even meant. This event taught me a lot about RSD and the people that have to go through it. I also learned there is no cure for it and my mom is going to have to deal with it for the rest of her life. Even though this isn’t a positive or happy memory I got good out of it. Learning about RSD helped me to figure out what I can do to make it easier on my mom and learn about the typed of things she’s going to have to experience at one point or another. This subject is very easy for me to talk about and I think it would be easy to write about, let me know what you think!

Monday, August 27, 2012

introduction post

Hey guys my names Kristen, all my friends normally call me otter. I came all the way down here from the boring little town Sicklerville, New Jersey. I have always been a so called "want to be" southern girl and have dreamt of attending college in South Carolina. I am attending upstate for my nursing degree and to make a difference. My mom went to school for nursing and I always have wanted to follow in her footsteps and get my degree.  I have been coming to South Carolina for all-star cheerleading ever since I was 7. I fell in love with it and decided I wanted to move here. After making up my mind I applied to all the major schools in the state. I applied to Clemson, costal Carolina, USC upstate and USC Columbia. I ended up getting a full ride to Columbia for athletics and academics but decided to come to upstate to cheer at a local gym in Greenville for my freshman year.
 A few of my passions are cheerleading and figure skating. I started cheerleading at 4 years old as the little one on my big sisters team. Ever since that day my life has revolved around cheerleading. I traveled all over the place to compete and attend camps. I am very athletic and enjoy doing any type of activity. I also love being around people and trying to do everything I can to make some ones day. I plan on making a difference everyday which brings me to my major, nursing. I plan on graduating from undergrad school in three years (taking summer classes) and attending grad school at Columbia to further my nursing career. I plan on getting an apartment and living in South Carolina throughout my schooling. Even though I am originally a jersey girl I am extremely happy to be down south.